Are We Preserving
Hawaii’s Resources?
Hawaii’s
resources have been depleting quickly so the citizens of Hawaii have been
working tirelessly to save our resources.
But our resources are still vanishing slowly. We need to stop using all of our resources. Our state is dying slowly but hopefully
we can stop it before it is to late.
We
are trying to save Hawaii by using renewable energy. Hawaii started to put up renewable energy like and
solar panels. This helps our
economy save money and save the o zone layer above Hawaii. This also helps us because we use less
imported oil so money can stay in Hawaii.
We also started to use wind farms.
They put up a wind farm in the Big Island, Maui and on Oahu. This will save our islands a lot of
money because they also plan to put under water cables so people on other
islands can get energy. The
renewable is a small portion of what we need to do we need to malama the aina
or care for the land.
There are many groups around Hawaii
trying to help the aina (land) so we can live here for a long time. There is one group that is called
Malama Maunaloa they take care of the ocean. One way they help the ocean by taking out invasive seaweed
and plant native seaweed. There is
also the Department of Land and Natural resources. They help fund projects to help Hawaii stay the same and
preserve it. They also plan
projects to preserve our natural and irreplaceable resources. Its good that there are people trying
to savor Hawaii but there are people who don’t.
Some
people don’t try to preserve Hawaii and aren’t changing their destructive life.
Some people still use a lot of fossil fuels. They mainly use fossil fuels for gas. We also use it for oil
in our cars. We some people hurt
our community by trashing it.
There are many people who litter Hawaii. There are also people who graffiti on our buildings and make
it look dirty. From people
trashing Hawaii we go to the conclusion.
In
conclusion I think we are preserving Hawaii well but people are still not
trying to preserve it. So it is
important that we get more people to preserve Hawaii.
I thought that your essay was a little too short. Also, you should fix the fragments, such as, "They mainly use fossil fuels for gas. We also use it for oil in our cars. We some people hurt our community by trashing it. There are many people who litter Hawaii. There are also people who graffiti on our buildings and make it look dirty."
ReplyDeleteyou should make your paragraphs a bit bigger and add in more facts, try to support your details also
ReplyDeletePlease follow the format of the five paragraph essay using the chunky paragraph. Also your reasoning is very basic and nothing is explained or discussed in-depth. For example, how exactly is wind farms going to "save our islands." Another example is what invasive seaweed is actually being taken out, and why is it invasive. Please spend more time completing the essay. AS(1+)
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