Sunday, November 3, 2013

Risky Buisness: Suicide


           There are any different types of risky business that can prevent future generations from being successful like teen pregnancy, trends, bullying, drugs and peer pressure.  But I think that the biggest problem that will prevent future generations from being successful is teen suicide.  Although teen suicide isn’t the top story in the news but I think it needs to be addressed as the suicide rate rapidly climbs.
            On the other hand suicide isn’t a major problem.  There are many reasons why but a big one is it is preventable because you have many options now day.  Like there are many websites that give you advice on what to do if you know someone will commit suicide or you will commit suicide. Two you can call a suicide hotline to get advice 1-800-273-8255.Lastly you can call or visit a psychologist. But there are more reasons why it is a major problem that needs improvement in its prevention plan.
            So I think that suicide is a major problem because of many reasons.  Like even though it is very preventable there is still much work to improve on in preventing teen suicide. There are statistics of how harsh suicide is around the world.  Statistics say that every year almost one million people die from suicide globally.  Suicide is one of the leading three causes of death for 15 to 44 year olds is suicide.  During the last 45 years the suicide rate has gone up by 60% worldwide.  For every one suicide committed there is about 25 suicide attempts, which means many teens have suicidal thoughts.  So that is why suicide is a major issue that needs to be prevented better.
            Out of the two arguments I have to say that the argument that suicide is a major issue is the stronger argument because there are more facts and they are stronger.  Like Statistics say that every year almost one million people die from suicide globally.  Suicide is one of the leading three causes of death for 15 to 44 year olds is suicide.  During the last 45 years the suicide rate has gone up by 60% worldwide.  For every one suicide committed there is about 25 suicide attempts, which means many teens have suicidal thoughts.  So I side with the issue is a big issue that needs to be prevented better because the rate is rapidly increasing.
            Since the rate of suicide is increasing in the world there is need for much improvement in how we prevent it because if we don’t the rate will increase start to increase like how the past 45 years the rate increased by 60% but with luck we can change that and bring it down way below.  We may not be able to stop it in all.  But it may be able to lower it a lot.

2 comments:

  1. Im going to guess and say that you you were aiming for the chunky paragraph format?
    The information you provided is very accurate and well elaborated. But if you were doing the chunky format, then you could try putting the information in the three body paragraphs and explain your reasoning twice while you're at it. Overall, I think its very satisfying and exceptional.

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  2. STOP USING "I"...I is only used for creative or personal writing. We know it is you writing the paper, you do not need to state that. Try to work on smoother transitions. "On the other hand suicide isnt a major problem" is to harsh of a transition after just stating that it is a problem in your thesis statement. Your first body paragraph doesn't tell use how it isn't a major problem but ends up being tips for people that want to commit suicide. This is a pro-con essay not a informational brochure. You have facts but need to provide more reasoning. Please read over essay and make changes to entire essay. AS(2)

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